Cora Dyce Homepage - "About Us"

I was reading the "About Us" section when you first come onto the homepage. I found it quite weird to read.

Cora Dyce was founded by Andy in march 2011. We we're located at Romeo & Juliets house in World 1. Due too much Spam we moved to the Spirit Tree wich is located North east of the GE. Cora Dyce has the biggest & most active Dicing Community in Rs and is the leading dicing clan in f2p. We're not moving to World 2 as like every other dicing clan did. We stay in World 1 where p2p gamblers and f2p gamblers come together and have a great time. Thanks to every Member for going with us through all the good and bad times in the past Year. Without you this great Community wouldn't exist.



Now. The parts in cyan, are the mistakes you have made and made it quite weird to read in my opinion.

march: Should have a capital to state the month we were formed in. Fix this.
we're: Shouldn't have the apostrophe between the 'e' and the 'r'. "We're" is short for "we are". So the sentence begins with, "We we are" <- in reality. Fix this, so it makes sense.
&: 5 times in the "About Us" it has either "& or and". 2 of which are "&", 3 are "and". Fix this, so it is "and" at every stage it is needed.
Spam: You do not need "Spam" to have a capital letter in the middle of a sentence. Fix this.
wich: Whoever wrote this, did you go to school? Is there a word such as "wich"? Fix this, to "which".
North east: Change to North-East. Like a compass has it.
1: Where I highlighted the "1". If you go to the "About Us" section on the homepage front, it doesn't have the number 1 there. It just says "World".
Member: Once again, you do not need a capital letter on member during this sentence.
Year: Don't need a capital on this, either.

Although in the last sentence, it has a capital on "Community". I agree with that completely, as we emphasize that we are a Community.

If we fix these problems, it will make us look more professional. It will make the sentences better to read, easier to read, but with wrong spellings, mistakes, capitalization where not needed, etc. Also remove the 3b drop party intro, we have had it already and are not advertising it anymore. Make an intro, like Dragon Dyce's. Just showing off we are a dicing clan. Or a compilation of payouts, whether it be 200k payouts or 2b payouts.


Thanks for reading.

I agree with you entirely. First impressions hit the hardest and to impress those that visit the site you need to make it look professional...I also made a point that the homepage was out of date but I never thought of an alternative...thinking about it you could have screen shots or a video of wagers to impress on those that visit just how rich the rewards are but that they also accept smaller bets.
I'm glad you noticed

thanks, because there haven't been loads of topics on this before

i understand where you're coming from but many people have already stated this.

I love how you point out all of the spelling and grammatical errors but fail to use it correctly in your paragraph below it. It belittles your point

-Ryan

we've made several topics on this and nothing has changed...

HlY | Award wrote:we've made several topics on this and nothing has changed...

So pretty much suggestions are pointless. Fixing the page isn't even something to consider it is something that should just be done.

Wreck | VNU wrote:thanks, because there haven't been loads of topics on this before

i understand where you're coming from but many people have already stated this.

Oh sorry. I didn't even see any I was just stating it will look more professional and easier to read.